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Poem Number 702
Broken Engine
Today, my lights don't work
My engines burnt
My girlfriend just played me like dirt
My feelings are hurt
And plus I got to deal with these jurks
Like I'm an enormous bomb
ticking down,
and ready to burst
But matters can't get worse
at first
I thought
I could talk to my mom
But moms is doin her thang
so I though I could bottle it up
Don't give a fuck
And try not to tear shit up
Hold my own, and don't dump.
so I figure I can fix it
take notes, so that ,next time
I let anyone ride I'll see if their phony
I won't care what they say or what or what they show me,
My 'rents hate me like everyone else
I'm falling so far I'm becoming as small as a mouse,
Nobody cares, nobody dares, to even say a word
What's so wrong with being me? You people make me hurl!
FUCK YOU ALL!!!
Cause I'm outta control
Don't give a shit nomore
Commentary:
This poem needs alot more. You people need to reach in more inside and pull out your feelings. Get more detailed. Throw all your angry words onto this poem.
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That's better! Remember, sometimes swearing can express one's feeling more then other words. Just by saying F*** makes me feel so much better. (God I'm a loser!)
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Cretins!
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You can find better ways to express yourself then by swearing. It's a lack of vocabulary.
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