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Teen Salon - One


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Poem Number 1716
I cant believe I'm saying this, Icant believe it's true. This pain needs to be released inside, so I'm releasing it out onto you. My heart has been ripped out now, My soul is set aflame.
My feelings I cant tell now, thick clouds inside my brain. invoking all my feelings, supressing all my hate. Telling you all this stupid stuff, but really it can wait
i know that it's impossible to work out and fire dies within a tidal wave of sorrow
the passion of ten thousand years are in me and i see your face in heart
will you ever return to me?
will you ever love me....love the way it was meant to be
you must...you must
it is the destiny unfolding within our bosoms
don't push it away ...don't throw away God's gift to you ...my darling
Ii is there, waiting for you and me.


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This poem was great except for the last line.It set's off the whole point of the poem.
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