black bread with butter
served with a bowl of beef stew
warming from within
yourself, look at you
trying to feed the world

Wonderful, Very nice collab. I love the life-texture, goodgood.
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it is to long, a haiku only has 3 lines and this one has four. u guys need to put your head on straight and learn about poetry. how stupid do people get these days? GOSH
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The above commentator (whom for further convenience I will reference as 'GOSH') has a point: The best-established tradition for English haiku is a three-line, 5-7-5 form. And this three-line form is especially favored here on IPP, since it is a common framework that multiple authors can use to work harmony. GOSH's commentary, as it relates to the form of what's here, is precise and appropriate.
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And yet, GOSH, take a chill pill. This place is interactive and collaborative. It's open. That means that sometimes people come along who are a little low on the clue-o-meter, and they do unwise things, like extending a haiku as though it were some kind of free verse. We have a culture here that can deal with that: You see it, and you say to yourself 'well that was dumb'; and if it really grates on your eyeballs you close the poem; and if it happens a lot, you address the people responsible, and civilly let them know that our interaction would work better if they controlled themselves.
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No need to jump on the matter instantly -- think it through for a week if you want, nothing bad will happen. No need to talk like this ku is approved by everyone here -- for the most part, we all know what a traditional haiku is, and we know that we know. And there's no need to shy away from signing your name -- 'most all the regulars here are mature enough to deal with a constructive suggestion, and the immature irregulars will just fling a couple semi-illiterate flames your way, and then usually they quit the site, being bored. No huhu. --eritain the longwinded geezer
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poetry
open and alive
un-anal

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Hmmmmmm. Sometimes I've noticed that fourth lines are often meant to be commentary and are from someone new to this site. It is very easy to enter commentary as a new line! Been there. Done that. Oops!! That's cliche!!! On a poetry site!! Horrors!!!
Lida Jo from Idaho
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Life is short. Let's all be mellow.
...BR