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Salon of Solo Poetry for Critique - Five


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Poem Number 3771
anti-aging properties

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Commentary:
Take off the critical sunglasses,
you're indoors now,

and stand up,
find woodwinds and strings
that soar

reach your hands
to affirmation,

know that you will fall victim
to your own

stained and dirty hands

but at this moment, you should roar

reach for a book

and throw it.
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for sure!
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for sure!
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Poem Number 3772
a new philosophy begins

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Commentary:
Pronouns are so easy to slip into.
A comfortable fabric for me,
I am so
lazy and tired
that I try to
sleepwalk,
dreamtalk,
write when I'm drunk
or stoned
and sinking.

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chalk it up too
when i'm drunk

or stoned and sinking,
thinking swimming is good and fine,
but I so badly want to get to the bottom of this
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oh! the bottom is such a sudden stop-
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