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Salon of Poetry for Critique - Four


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Poem Number 305
Could you
.
If I offered myself in love
stood before you, could you
hold my eyes, and allow me
to discover the surprise of you.
Could I unwrap you like
a treasure, then savour
the tracing of my hands
on your chest, feeling
the sweet trembling anticipation
of your pleasure......
your indrawn breath.
Could I brush my lips over
your exposed skin, taste the
salt of you with my tongue
kiss your neck, softly, gently,
and then, seek your lips.
Could you taste me
taste all of my desires
find me like no other
our hearts both filled with fire.
Could you lay me down on a cloud
as you gently kiss my lips
could you find your way across the map of my soul
with your porcelan fingertips


Commentary:
I would penetrate your lonely,
stanza line by line the moan of you,
corazon the intimacy missed,
and feed you bless,
bliss your stress like rain in my hand,
candy your jungled mind,
refine your unrequition,
and give you three guesses(wishes!).
who am I?

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I believe you are the fly. *s.t.*
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With sweet release,
I exhale upon your breast.
*s.t.*
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(the fly.. aka "ewmf")
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