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Poem Number 393
Time in a Bottle
raindrop in an ocean


Commentary:
My grandson (20) said, "Time sucks!" I started to sing , "If I could save time in a bottle". He took it from there:
I'd sell it at triple the price,
But three times nothing is nothing,
So, I'd have to sell it twice.
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I told him he should be a song writer.
...WR
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he's clever!
:)
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He must get it from you ---RJ
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Thanks, RJ. He's lived with me for 4 years. So I wouldn't be alone after my wife died. It's been a good arrangement.
...WR

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where are your poems, it has been a while. I miss them ---RJ
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Just don't feel inspired lately.
...WR
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iT'S IS THERE, YOUR ARE JUST TAKING A REST,
sorry about that my key lock was on. Write about a relaxing day on the beach, waves sea birds, fog at sea, a lighthouse, the sunset over the sea. Come on give it the old college try ---RJ
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