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Poem Number 348
i'm gone now, tried so hard to be a friend or a lover or a pal or something
nothing made you happy and you love to abuse and hurt
i imagine you are chewing off your arm somewhere out there in the universe
i hope it tastes good! maybe like rabbit meat or something. chow.
Commentary:
for every gift a punishment for every hope some salt
it hurts to fall, it's hard to try - and it's like drowning
if each invitation to explore is inconvenient, inaccurate, unsuitable or
unreturned
i have yet to have the opportunity to earn the scorn - and i would prefer to merit it of my own accord -
it is an attraction so strong for me, that my wish and desire is that though it seems to repel - it would be realized instead of destroyed by insinuation
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"i have yet to have the opportunity to earn the scorn - and i would prefer to merit it of my own accord -" what does this mean?
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and this also, what does it mean? i'm sorry but i find your statements confusing.
"it is an attraction so strong for me, that my wish and desire is that though it seems to repel - it would be realized instead of destroyed by insinuation"
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first answer: it seems like you're mad at what i remind you of, because i don't feel like i've ever gotten time to share who i really am with you
second answer: i would rather kiss you than piss you off
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thankyou for replying openly, i appreciate that. i would like to know you, come make yourself known to me.
i am not certain about the comment "seems like you're mad at what I remind you of" - perhaps we can discuss?
i would rather be kissed than be pissed off :)
i don't like being confused.. and i have felt it in many interactions with you. maybe that can be surmounted through mutual consideration(s)?
thank you again.
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"i don't like being confused.. and i have felt it in many interactions with you. maybe that can be surmounted through mutual consideration(s)" me2
& conversation...please ask/tell/give me where&when - i can't ask any more...too many nos...
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i am free sat. evening. i believe you have my email to reach me at...you can confirm you are free then?
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in the interest of stepping out of inuendo and into the light - i will risk but - i just want to say i was hoping you would relieve me of what is the scaldingly scary part for me...
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then i will email you? happy to :) let me know if that is the correct interpretation to your comment above and i will do so :)
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i would appreciate that
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..even tho'...i did the very scary thing...
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done :)
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i roll my eyes with minorly frustrated amusement, & a twinkle
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i roll my eyes with minorly frustrated amusement, & a twinkle
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Why?
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roflol
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thanks for reminding me that life happens in real time!-
there must be so many scary grrls out there..
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WTF
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