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Poem Number 9454
monkeys bark in the darkness
run like a pack of dogs through the trees
limbs and fruit come crashing to the ground
here to the floor of this dream which envelopes me
we roll in the fat wet grass as jungles dissolve
here on the terracota floor of the world in the light of unconciousness
we are swimming in vapor fragrance mist morning fog lit by fires we're radient
veil of holiness we look how we feel in this mystery that whispers your name to me
you see me dream of you dreaming your eyes flicker lsd in you rem
your cat is sleeping up on my back its purring pushing reminds this isnt real
sweet amanda dreaming of you sparks the warm embrace of my heart
...........all those many years ago"
Interesting poem. Not for the lazy in mind. ^^ Dolka
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interesting yes--seems to speak of evolution--since i don't embrace that theory--i believe in creation--i can't agree with what i see in it --but it is a well written poem--window watcher
. it speaks nothing of evolution, trash that glitch voyeur. "ignorance and
prejudice and fear walk hand in hand". there was a boy in my old neighborhood
who stood at the gate to the baseball field with his bat his ball his glove and
his anger so, we all played frisbee. now he would move. we were kids then...dt%
dont you see just the impressions of the images i try to speak. even wounded
the human mind is the single most fascinating thing our lord gave us. but if some
insist on kicking dirt then i can go there as well, know how, grew up on earth...dt%
DT, I think you are being unfair and unkind about window watcher's comment. Maybe he did misunderstand but he was kind in his comments to you and I can see how he could have understood it to be evolution. I don't find from ww's comments that he is at all ignorant and as far as kicking dirt, I think the only one kicking is you! JimT
Agree Jim T, dt% read poem 9464, if he got something different from it don't kick him. Foolish to get upset if someone sees something different in our poetry than we intended. oldtimer
Calm down, DT...Window Watcher is one of the most level headed people in here and takes the time to comment on almost every poem. This is a poetry corner, not a war room.
If you can't accept comments, don't submit. ~nr
there is an overwhelming presence of political correctness that seems to me to stifle a free discourse of poetic meanderings in this lil room. i just dribble out my lil spur of the moment writing and then someone very peacefully tells me that there fear of the possibility it may elude to something that they do not see eye to eye with is contained within. jeeeeeezzzz people its a friggin lil poem that looks at a time in my life when i was very happy to be alive and involved with the most wonderful girl. but it has to be dragged into, (however politely) into the oldest most useless point of mental masturbation in human history. i love comments to what i write, people see interesting
things in poetry that i do not always see. here i shall explain myself which defetes the whole concept of this rom i believe but here i go. first four lines elude to a fascination she had with the wizard of oz. the next four speak to how no matter what happened or where we were when we were in each others arms the world was insignificant. the next three to that mystery that makes lovers feel lifted up from there prior loveless selves. the last lines simply wake me out of this sense memory of my time with her. so there its just about love you know , not famine or war, nor pragmatic freewill....dt%
this is the last time i wiil explain away the value of what i write so as to appease the
the apparent "fear" of others. its friggin poetry people, no ammendment to the constitution, no fuel for bible study, i write ........................dt%
No one asked you to explain DT, just asked you NOT to be rude. Can see you didn't get the message.
SCREW YOU ALL
boy--guess i really messed up--let me offer a public apology to you dt%--my comment apparently offended you--never was my intention--it is obvious i thought the poem was about evolution--i respect everyone's right to believe as they wish--including mine--i was merely stating that since i didn't embrace that belief myself i couldn't comment on the content of your poem--my assumption of the meaning of your poem was wrong--i am sorry i came to the wrong conclusion--i am sorry for my misjudgement of your work--sorry if i didn't make myself clear--you diffinately read more into my comment than i intended--or meant--there are enough battles out there in the world than for me to deliberately bring one in here--lets have peace--window watcher
thanks to all who understood--WW
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