Noiseless pain, intensified sorrow
vibrations of human agony whispering in her ear
The earth in her shroud of darkness groans
men and women, little children impoverished of peace and joy
Feeling the oppressors crushing wheels
they slowly rise up to write their bitter words anointed with tears
they sit alone in little cells
writing on bits of tissue..cloth
Like Solzhenitzyn maybe
poems really..poems to remembered hell
To expand to pages..to chapters..to books
To be read then pulled across the jailors throat

Daniel if you have the poem in hand better write it..someone is closing everything ??...jake
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Thanks for the tip jake - I am writing this one off the cuff...trying to understand oppression ... Daniel
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oh yes Daniel I wanted to ask if you are coversant in German..and if you are familar with Mann,Frish,Musil...I enjoy their work very much and would like to talk about it somtime if you have the time............Jake
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I'm not conversant in German at all, something you seem lose after a few generations in a foreign country ... I have some knowledge Mann, his son and Musil ... I am not acquainted with Frisch at all ... Daniel
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Great then at some time I hope we can discuss Mann in English...If one can around the insipid French that is shot through Mann..I would suggest "I'm not Stiller" by Frish at your leasure............Jake
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oh yes and "The man without Qualities" Musil ...wonderfull)))))))jake
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Hey folks, a couple of questions if I may. Being new, I was wondering
if it's ok to converse here, as no one ever seems to be in chat. Also,
is it ok to place completed poems here for commentary, since the other
menu options, open mic and critique, don't offer or don't seem to get
interaction. Just want to respect the protocal. thanks, Paul
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We often do complete poems here Paul..thats fine it doen't protect against add ons however I think a completed poem often spea ks for it's self and is respected...and chatting in the commentary section is often and often the most enjoyable part for me..sometimes it gets a bit testy like all families..best to have a tough skin and a soft interior is my thought.............jake
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oh also it is wise to look in the completes if you have an on going ie I responed to your last under "The Curfew Tolls"..I am Jake120@juno.com we also often do this
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also the poet below this writingAllan has a web site,a great web site that I would be happy to provide you with I you are interested....me again I type and get off before I think off times
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Jake & Daniel,a poetry 101 question-Do you or most of this room routinely draft a poem before posting? I know some of it is off the cuff but do you think it helps to write it before posting? Can you do a better job? Of course that doesn't include interactive works.J
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J I work both ways generally in theses short forms I have no draft..and it often shows...jake
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Jake -Thanks. I just wondered. Sometimes I do best off the cuff and other times not.Always enjoy your workJ.
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Jake -Thanks. I just wondered. Sometimes I do best off the cuff and other times not.Always enjoy your workJ.
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thank you J..........jake