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Poem Number 23178
December Sunshine
a construction workers painkiller for cold


Commentary:
In the cool December sunshine of your smile
I sit and bask for a while.
Chill in the air
and silver in your hair.
Icy blue and shiny too,
the light in your eyes
and comfort in the size...
Voice like a breeze
chilling me to freeze.
I await the coming thaw,
the wonder, and the awe
of the cool December sunshine in your smile.
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*Phenom

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well done. i really like the rhythm and the almost-repetition in the first and last lines. i didn't feel like your rhyme was forced. good job! *grace
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