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Poem Number 23173
we walked our cool morning walk together
and while i pointed at the pond at the turtles on the log
you pointed at the sky at the purples in the clouds
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This is one of the best poems that i have ever read here. My only suggestion would be to write it in five lines; the breaks occuring at pond and sky. really very well done ~f
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thanks. i think that's great advice. -chandler
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