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Poem Number 21005
FROM A STRAY DOG'S DIARY


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A DAY IN THE LIFE OF A STRAY DOG

He licked the small cute bitch goodbye
while her lovers waited in scattered packs
wanted to hunt a rabbit for a change
but in vain he wasted his hours hunting
cursed he the men who devoured them clean
he ran for leftovers at the back yard of the rich
already late, he would sleep hungry
for he knows these times of was & feared
sure was he would be late and fast on his toes
and true he was late as he missed that too
children of men were faster that him
he cursed again, these men of little hearts
he made a turn to go for the butcher's yard
where a bone or two may fill his guts
bad luck haunted him, the bones were gone-
to a nearby factory where make manure
he snarled and took to his four, since no choice
remembered he his hidden reserve
hidden under the dust in the farmers farm
sniffed the ground to find spot he hid
a stone at the back scattered his dreams
turned to see the farmers son with a load of it
licking his back he cursed the cruel men
in anger wanted to rush to the cemetery near
he was sure to get at least a piece of skull
there all his hunger crashed on what he saw
there was a tear or two gushing from his eyes
flowing thru the long chin as he silently howled
weeping women ,children all there in black
burying their dead men all game in this war
he growled way back and thought he would sleep
but hunger made him tough to nap
ran he to his bitch for a hug and silent sob
luck never favoured him on this day, far he saw-
the small cute bitch ornamental on her mistress lap
the party is on for a war they have just won
the men in uniforms all lined to secure
but stray dogs not allowed, sentry’s face was stern
he took on his heels for a timeless run
he cursed himself for the day he was born
snarled on himself why ever born in human world
they kill, they cry and they celebrate all that well
John Devv

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effective new perspective i like the structure, good writing. raul
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enjoyed the work and jumbled grammar at parts. dogs aren't the best at accurate human speak. loved the internal rhyme and rhythm. thank you for posting. pn.
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Good topic with a moral to the poem ~ Jim
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