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Poem Number 16920
I still walk
---Anonymous
this winding trail
---Anonymous
and remember
---and remeber
my heart lifted
---Anonymous
in your embrace,
---Anonymous
warmed by your
---Anonymous
radient touch,
---Anonymous
and the wishes ...
---Anonymous
I follow
---Anonymous
mostly by instinct,
---Anonymous
yet still lose sight
---Anonymous
of you sometimes.
---Anonymous
I've made another wish,
---Anonymous
though you might
---Anonymous
be too far above
---Anonymous
this canopy of night,
---Anonymous
to see the twinkling.
---~Steve
(for me to see the twinkling)
---correction to last line
Commentary:
Lovely ~ Ed
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Thanks much Ed :)
After posting I almost always try to change things, so here's a rewrite although I don't know if it's any better.
Still I walk this trail
and remember;
head lifted to the sight
heart warmed in your
radient embrace,
the wishes ...
~
I lost sight of you
at a bend (or fork)
in the road
Now even instincts
can't find the way back.
~
So, here's another wish ...
though you might
be too far above
this canopy of night,
for me to see
the twinkling.
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nice poem, reflecting the longing for what once was.'a'
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As a veteran of losing sight of "what was," this poem really hit home.
Thanks, lin
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