Blind love blurred my vision of you
like an impressionist painting
enchanting portrait by Renoir
faults covered by master brush strokes

Dreamy love gave way to logic
Your picture turned to a Rembrandt
sharp, focused on every detail
like true photo likeness of you

There is the wart of selfishness
pockmarks of ignorance on face
Makeup covers scar of prejudice
Indeed, love can be very blind

beautiful. makeup covers scars of prejudice. just beautiful. until. . .the last line. . .which was kindof cliche. the rest. stunning.
chandler
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Indeed, stunning is the word!
)Kaleb
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Chandler, Kaleb = Comliments from good poets is a delight. Chandler, what's good fit for last line? Thanks. = Ben
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maybe you could try to point at the evolution of art in the last line. . . it seems that with "blind love" you are stating an understood theme. Maybe you could try to point out . . .
hmmn. . .what is the first line supposed to mean? Maybe if you used language that was more clear there, you could find a better ending from that?
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anon = What you say is interesting. Can you translate that into a specific final line that's not the cliche Chandler was referring to? Thanks for trying. = Ben
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this is a wonderful piece. for the last line ... post-modernism ... surrealism??? Drm
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Proposed last line: "Yes, love creates double vision!"
Any opinions? = Ben
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Drm = Glad you liked poem. Is new last line better? = Ben
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Ben, I think the new last line is better. You manage to escape the cliche well. -jeffh
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So be it, Jeff. Thank you. = Ben
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I love it! :) ~Lady_Jazmin