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Teen Salon - One

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Poem Number 1971

the life is really busy
really busy
Like a day that starts
And night is never again
its still moring
the day has beagan
life is a pain and the sun is bland
and the hurt from one life burried in the sand
can make life much shorty
Commentary:
last line is not really concerning. otherwise a unique one
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yar.......! i started this poem but it all goes wrong. so consider it nothing. watch out poem 1972!
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you might want to try to start the poem off differently then add this into it somewhere
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