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Poem Number 21966

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Commentary:
This son of a bitch here has a character sheet. She has damn character sheet!

Things in the universe stopped stopping for the red lights, in order to begin contributing towards creating a kind of...temporal courtroom...a kind of...area in spacetime, a...rift. Nobody noticed, of course--for them it was as though just walking down the alley on the way back home, and you see various materials being collected up by some micro-whirlwind. Nobody realizes those are the ingredients for a later reckoning.

According to her character sheet, her value at 10 carats is 160.17 (in US dollas).

That's right. This person comes carrying an actual character sheet that you can check out, with various stats such as:
Liability to Exit Online Space: None
Is friends with vizual: Could be
Knows Ann: Yes
Knows Ann Personally: No
PERL Knowledge: Voodoo
BOFH (Bastard Operator From Hell) Capacity: Snipper
...

The list goes on and on. It's cool to keep such a list. It shows the people your qualities, and simultaneously serves as a type of 'range' of things your can personally improve.

She just keeps polishing herself.

.=Garnet=.
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so it's good to hand off the baton to a suitable replacement. right at the 400 meter mark no less.

invoke the fury, and godspeed.

amber (really leaving now, i swears)
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No further questions, your honor. .=Garnet=.
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dude in the awarehouse keeps singing a song by elton john called benny and the jets.. but no, he is singing johnny and the jets over and over i want to say its benny muh but i dont even know if he knows the lyrics besides the fact that i dont want to try to convince myself that i know the lyrics and i dont want to excavate the territory of changing the lyrics so then i can listen to bro sing a song with lyrics that i am responsible for... oh shit scissors.
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...3mj
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exactly. he's a snipper.

But, you know, after you've been the Last Man From Earth, you're pretty much set. Hope you find some kind of resolutions. /rv
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I've got purple Mescal worms crawling out of my monitor. I knew I should

have stuck to the Cognac, but

I just love the delicate sound the jewels make when they fall onto an in-

clined wooden surface.

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