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Poem Number 15498

Cape Jasminia

Commentary:
Jasmine
Gardenia
Her glossy evergreen leaves
Her large white, sweet fragrant, flower
Pleasant
I placed
One in her hair
When we were young lovers
Walking, talking and dreaming of
Our lives
Call me
Reminiscer
Telling old love stories
Deliciously aged and sad
Alone

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psichore
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Well done, psichore. I like the way it's phrased into lines. It seems to put a strong emphasis at the beginning of each line (except the 3rd and 4th lines). sa
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Love this! m.e.
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fragrant exotic memories. i love this too..ms
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thank you for the commentary... I did stumble over my syllables a little in line 3 and 4... I even got the count wrong in line three... "Glossy evergreen leaves" would have sufficed... psichore
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It is beautiful...it is good to feel your writing again! The fragrance of this poem has embraced me! However it is never too late to feel like "young lovers":))) Patricia
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