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Poem Number 23051

muted
Commentary:
born in second gear,
revving, hot, fast.
pushing the redline.
grew up in second gear.
burning too much oil,
both kinds;
taking the turns with
wild predictability,
sullen sincerity.
living in second gear.
tires are still good.
slamming slow fists
into mother pavement,
yeah, an easy punch
to pull.
06/16/07
-jerry
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Jerry, I like it! I like the metaphor and the imagery it creats. There is anger and frustration evident, too--anyway, I enjoyed the read..keep writing! JFC
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thanks for your kind words, JFC.
-jerry
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Ilike it too Jerry, especially the ending.
)Kaleb
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