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Poem Number 23323
Let me say goodbye
Commentary:
Release me from your spell and simply say goodbye,
let me collect the smiles that with you I could not stop,
My fleeting footsteps on the porch of your elusive soul
The soft kisses that I meant to give you but could not.
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Let me go away carrying memories in my pockets,
the few pieces left of a love that I so tried to show,
those passionate kisses that made my spirit glow.
Do not cry for me out of mercy, just let me go.
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My bags are filled with desires of what will not be,
eventhought once we swore our love was forever.
I will surely miss the sunsets that we forgot to see,
the mornings when we will not wake up together.
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.Let the moon's tears and mine become one ,
I will not look for your face in a cold starry night,
nor I will keep you warm by holding you tight,
as I always did when I glanced a those distant lights.
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Bid farewell to me swiftly and do not look back,
Let this painful adieu conquer the fear within me.
Allow me to live among the leaves in the wind
and like them, learn again, what it is to be free.
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Hermestri
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Well done!! Understated emotion that comes through to the reader--I wouldn't change a thing! I especially like your last verse...JFC
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I second that.
"I will surely miss the sunsets that we forgot to see" touched me deeply. Thank you for sharing. DJC
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Heartfelt! Remember that when one door closes another opens. Don't look back!
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My apologies! It's Daniel K here!
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I'll third that. Very well done.
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Bravo, well written and heartfelt!
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Agree with all the above comments. Very nice! MS
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