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Poem Number 16714

His Twilight
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his flesh
like an old wrinkled shirt
stained purple
worn, tired
flat.
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propped up
pillowed.
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shadowed by
antiseptic lighting.
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his once strong face
stubbled gray
etched away.
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this twilight is fading.
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Commentary:
To be replenished
In a greater dawn...cem
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what a simple, striking poem, m.e., and what a fitting response, cem...well done. ms
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ditto ms. ~ audee
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Yes, i too agree with ms. words well and meaningfully chosen. Excellent!...fallon
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beautiful, original descriptions. evocative. -chandler
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