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Poem Number 19173
Curar
(Spanish. Verb. Meaning: "to cure")
Commentary:
I must write now because
we've decided to burn the city.
We've been inside the church
but it's god is gone.
Something has poisoned her pond,
and her park is deserted.
Wildlife once rich and flourishing has fled.
The birds have raised thier voices in disgust
like demonic harmonicas, circling, mourning.
Have you not heard them?
And we cannot silence thier voices, and so we must.
We must go quickly, silently from each
once-pretty street and cul de sac like thieves
and kiss our fire to the houses, musn't we?
Musn't we forget it's glories and disavow the meaning,
and it's promises? Even of this vile destructive act, too?
Musn't we hold each other for compassion as we watch her burn?
Is it not appropriate that I cry for her as you cry for her, even if we cannot cry together?
I cannot imagine a better city.
But I am glad that we can burn her together.
It's my only comfort now.
Mi solo sanalatodo.
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(Mi solo sanaltodo means: "My only cure-all")
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Interesting. Has a very ... provincial tone. You seem like some romantic bard, sitting in a tree, whittling out these words. "even if we cannot cry together" indeed ;) riverfr0zen
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(also, see what I did there? i am escalating my vocabulary. no longer shall it be 'village', but the more refined 'provincial'. i'm just going to go about life calling everything 'provincial'.
someone will say "How do you do today, sir?"
"Mmm yes," i will say snobbishly. "Very good, very good. Very provincial day today."
look for it in upcoming posts. riverfr0zen
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This is a serious and autobiographical account of my most inner provincial emotional being, and you have the UTTER AUDACITY to poke and jibe, sir? I have a mind to extricate you from your common meager life and force you into servitude for the king, were I not so compassionate and forthright.
:)
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the exorcism of hcs 1
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really? if this is serious then your language is being tossed around like a robot.
for nextime: goats are better simulated than sheeps
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