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Poem Number 19125

counterbalance
Commentary:
when i am low,
you sense me
and, like feather wings,
lift me toward the azure blue

when the colors buzz and hum
and i am trembling there alone
you wrap me in the greens and golds
you hide me like an oak

in the sweetest violin i can find you
the sonata trilling the language of your soul
within all good things lies your heart
each harmonic pulse so radiant and bright

i am the still and dark
and you grasp for me
to lead me into that shining patch
of starlight

amber

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this is very nice, amber. i love the last stanza especially. - N
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IS this true, though...or is it just "too good to be true"?
-ewmL

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I like how it goes from bright, fairly loud imagery into a somewhat more hauntingly quiet place at the end. riverfr0zen
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well, if you are talking about emotional truth, yes, it is true. of course i am not being wrapped in leaves, thrown up into the sky or dragged out into the night. but maybe i should be :).

amber
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