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Poem Number 19061

She rained on my yesterday

Commentary:
She rained on me yesterday
llovido llovido llovido
rained rained rained
and it's content was like the
gossamer of a hundred stars
that had shed thier coccoons
and drifted down like some soft Neruda poem
upon me
sobre mi pelo,
sobre mi camisa,
sobre mi mente.
And noting the temperature
I imagined it to be her gift
Or else:
-toda mi imaginación es acentuada en ella.
Siempre.
Como siempre.
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que bonita!

amber
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A beautiful muse :D

"all my imagination is accentuated in her.
Always.
As always."
Luscious pomeage!

-t
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Partout!
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for how long will your flog your ability to appear instantly beautiful via foreignism?

;) /wc
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(it's great) /wc
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ˇAzotaré mi capacidad apenas mientras toma para que su parte trasera cerebral sea agradable y rojiza! :)
Thanks.
-ewmL

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