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Poem Number 340

The first time i would smoke
I mean to toke
Commentary:
The first time I would chong out would be a year ago
I liked it though I was all fucked up on it
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The first time I got cheeched up was about 30 years ago..
I was fucked up on it for the next eight years.

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OOOOOOkaaaaaaaaaaaay, that's ur problem,;0
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- was - my problem.
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