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Poem Number 339
It was the day it would happen
I had a sense
of destiny peering over my shoulder
as I studied my face in the mirror.
Commentary:
I had a sense that we would share
something so special with loving care
i loved you so much I'd do anything
when we were together I'd give you my ring
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I wanted to tell you so bad
but i couldn't
thought you'd feel sad
for me at least
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I didn't want to come off as immature
and I didn't want to seen possesive
I wanted to be seen as a lady
and a girl that was strong
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I wanted you to know that I love you
and that is so true
I want to be your love
and be your star in the sky above
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