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Poem Number 325
Don't Cry
I've been gone forever
Commentary:
when I saw you
standing there
sunlight shining
in your auburn hair
the moon was running
from your eyes
it seemed to me
you were wearing
a disguise
-
why are you crying?
was it something I said?
if I did anything to hurt you
girl
I must have been out of my head
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as I watch you
laying there
starlight sparkling
in your sunlight hair
anticipation
in your eyes
tender pleasure
in your gentle sighs
-
why are you crying?
warm tears flow free
why are you crying
girl?
are you crying for me?
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as I hold you
in my arms
my body tasting
all your golden charms
I feel questions
in your eyes
and I shiver
at our unspoken lies
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I can taste you crying
salt tears on my tongue
why are you crying
girl?
our time’s just begun
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