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Poem Number 23205

Oh

Commentary:

Take a step back then
breathe
If I were you
I wouldn't waste your time
you see
pretty soon they'll be taking body parts
from me
and it always starts
when the electricity shoots
straight the veins
as I double over
holding my pain
I'll say it again
please, just step away
you don't want my money
besides, soon there won't be
much left of me.

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My New Love
You always disappoint me.
Stumbling over stones
and scratching my arms and my legs
on the branches of trees,
I run to get to you.
My heart beats
like a fast marching band;
my skin tingles.
I am a tumultuous mess.
And there you are, again:
song of the mountain,
gold of the prairie,
bold and magnificent,
hero, idol,
my new love,
who always disappoints me.
sg
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