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Salon of Solo Poetry for Critique - Five

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Poem Number 3763

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You aspire to austerity.
No more than plain food,
a glass of still water,
taken with silent thanks.
 
Each word is measured for
wisdom; discarding those
that fall short. You wish
to be diminished, reduced.
 
But when you laugh it is usually inappropriate:
rude and sexy.
You burst out with suprising force;
overwhelmed by joyful insubordination.
 
Your pleasures are secret:
dark chocolate in the dead of night;
a glass of red; an orange bra; idle hours;
but never on a Sunday.

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missing only a playmate, even on a sunday
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what a great line:"overwhelmed by joyful insubordination"
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oh yeah, it's your playmate!!
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