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Poem Number 23176

In London
Commentary:

beneath the new bridge
offwhite stems of broken pipes
amber bones of beasts


a lost meal ticket
two complimentary beers
she shares her secret


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beautiful.
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Thank you :)
I think now I would change 'shares' to 'tells'.
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have to agree with p, "tells" implies something she knows, rather than something she has, much more interesting...f

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