Poem Number 23054

strike delay

where is the enemy today?
who is the enemy today?
what is the enemy today?
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today.
today.
oh oh oh,
today is the enemy,
all brightly feathered, shining,
yellow, blue, red and
blood filled.
today is the enemy.
06/20/07
-jerry
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Again, you've said a lot with just a few words--another good one! I think it would be even better if you left out the "oh oh oh" line... ??? What do you think? JFC

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wow, this is great! -chandler
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indeed.
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aahhh jerry, so good.
raul
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thanks for kind words, JFC, chandler, poet great whose symbol i cannot create, and raul (where you been?). JFC, i did try to omit that line, but to me it makes for a little sarcasm...plus it adds rhythm, though offbeat.
-jerry
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*smile* Always remember: you are the final editor of your work!! You are the only one who knows what you are trying to say--so, if a comment or a suggestion works--for you--keep it--if not, ignore it!! and, no hard feelings!! *grin*
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in and out, up and down, i still drop in from time to time and it's so good to see the familiar names.
raul