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FLicker-
memories fkicker like the lights
what ive seen and known
dot remember much
vague images stick like glue
bloody streaked hand prints
bloody stained bed sheets
bloody dirty life
that wont wash away
people from the past
i see them where ever i go
some of them are dead
there goes one now
and as the rain falls
i sit and ponder in silence
of the things that i have
and things i'll never do
the lights are getting dimmer
i must go befor they do
i have to get back to
the place i was before
-corn flake girl
(okay guys critque away do you like it?)
Anonymous, ;
"Senses" 3.21.99
My heart creeps silently
slowly timidly
shyly peeking around the
corner of fear.
I hear its tender footsteps,
tinkling shadow prints
on the glass of past lives.
I smell its sweetness,
flattering your soul.
I see its graceful glowing movements,
lavender ones moving softly
like the breeze of white
lace, yellow spring.
I taste the hope it
vulnerably holds in its
broken palm.
I sense quiet despair,
joyful in its emotions.
This is the first poem I have put here, comments please?!!!!! -LacySoul
LacySoul, ;
I really like this,so thanks.
alexis, tallahassee,FL,USA; meaghanbuntin@hotmail.com
I think you did a real good job on that poem. My step-father had rape me and I reallly didn't have a way to express myself. And whenn I read that poem it touch me a lot.
Anonymous, ;
Nice going.
Luk, Turkey; sancho@rambler.net
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